Blech. Boring update over. For today, here's a cool thing to try.
Take a song. One with lyrics you could submit as poetry, and a beautiful melody. Play it and close your eyes and find the character who is telling you these things, the person in this story. But the thing is, pay attention to what is being said over and above the actual words. What is the emotion, the music, telling you?
Here's the song I used in my class.
Now try it with a song with no words.
I think the best writing is like this Rachmoninoff piece. What it says most powerfully, it says without words. What songs would you try with this?